Yeah, besides, all stories have their moments. I mean, if it failed to captivate attention and keep it throughout those thirty pages, then you might have to deep six them, but it didn't. It holds the interest and reads quite fluently. So I wouldn't really mess with it, but its your call. You know how set up is, and besides, at least you didn't spend 10,000 words doing set up. Yeow!

As for D4, the cliches would have driving me mad. And I so hated the whole, "I hate my Dad, but since he came to rescue me all is forgotten, I love you Daddy and now I am a McClain" part. Somebody just shoot me!!!